Sleeping Valor

The italic's is her writting, though I am debating if it should be her thoughts just because then I'd have to find another way to indicate thoughts. So it maybe ...

Thanks a bunch to everyone who read this and liked it, I really appreciated your comments. The story is under way, please check out Chapter 1 (which includes this little ...

^_^ Well if you get stuck feel free to ask for help and ideas.

Thanks for the comments, I think I made all the changes except the one about "he considered himself lucky to even remember...". That one I left because, though I realise ...

a) I like it. b) We are kindred spirits c) I love helping people, especially the ones who appreciate it. ^_^ No idea why, I just do. =P

The tense is fine then, like I said I wasn't sure. As for the description, maybe try moving it back to where she is describing the attacker. Something like(back right ...

^_^ Finally got to read this. Looks good! He's not like I expected him to be but he has my aproval. I do have some comments though (now that I ...

That night was my last night, although I obviously didn't know it at the time. It was my last night as a human. Repeating 'night' is redundant. It also takes ...

:D Saase is a world concept. I unfortunately haven't yet solidified the actual plot that takes place on said world. >.< But it was alot of fun to write! (and ...

lol. Unfortunately that is my weakness. The major points. I've got all the side-plots and twists and I can create a world concept off the top of my head, but ...

lol. It is! Hopefully you don't have my curse: if I'm not sitting in a car of a bus I tend to pace around while I daydream and sometimes actually ...

The story looks good but I feel rushed to finish it because of the current spacing. Please please please space out the paragraphs more! I usually just ignore stories that ...

>.< Read this after Chapter 1. I'm off to bed, but I will definitely come back her and give you come comments (since I actually think I might have some ...

=P I'll try not to die from anticipation. :D Ooooooh. If you're super bored you could look at some of the things I put up. Only 2 recenly I think. ...

*wants to say she shoukd post it* >.< You probably shouldn't. Think of all the poor people who haven't seen what you've already put up! Flooding the boards will probably ...